Here it goes 50 words. I think my paper could use some more flow, at times its no doubt chunky. Change up some word choices after reading through everyone else’s essays. I think i’ll connect back to my thesis more, and i’m very excited to get my feedback.
Nothing Worth Having is Easy
Pete,
What do you mean by “flow?” Do you mean you want to work on how you transition between your ideas? Or between your paragraphs? Or between your sentences?
By “chunky” do you mean that you have extraneous sentences that don’t pertain to your main ideas? Do you mean that your ideas don’t connect to one another in a satisfactory manner?
I’m curious what it was about reading your peers’ essays that made you want to “change up some word choices?”